Advice on my short poem about a relationship?

Okay, so I got a little bored, so I wrote a poem. I guess its about a relationship, but it must be some random person's relationship. lolz, but what do you think about it?





Just Surviving





I longed to have you -


To have you in my heart and my arms,


At the end of a long day.


I wanted to be reminded of,


All the little things I love about you.





Your personality amazes me -


Hypnotizes me.


Your smile leaves me speechless,


Even though I have seen it a dozen times.


Your eyes leave me lost -


Lost in our potential togetherness.


Your small gestures here and there,


Confirm my love for you.


Your whispered words I hang from,


Allowing little space between us.





Everything I love about you,


Isn't here with me tonight.


I am left alone -


Alone with the small fragments of you,


Just surviving.





So, what do you think? All comments and suggestions are welcomed. Thanks %26lt;3Advice on my short poem about a relationship?
i think if you eliminate the whole midsection while elaborating on the last section which seems much more interesting, what are those fragments which you cling to? and how do these fragments embody those general things u describe in the middle paragraph? i think the middle paragraph isn't that special, like i've heard it a million times before, that's why i say elaborate on the last paragraph which has stronger imagery and more potential for good description. its a very specific state which you can delve into, which can better grab the reader emotionally.